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It was a Saturday night and as usual you were in a fight with your older brother Arthur. "Come on Artie let me you!"
"Do you know what kind of guys are actually at those parties _____________?"
"You go to those parties," you snapped back.
His face went red with anger, "Exactly my point, this is my chance to get drunk and not give a damn about the consequences I don't want you there!"
"The British dude is right," Alfred said.
You crossed your arms, "It's not fair."
"Life's not fair," Arthur snipped. "Come on Al, we're leaving."
"W-wait for me," Matthew said quietly following them out the door.
"It's not fair!" you pouted collapsing onto the couch.
A voice from the other side of the couch giggled, "Ohonhon~."
You snapped up, "Hello?"
"Ohonhon~."
"Francis, what the hell are you doing in my house?" You threw a pillow at the offending Frenchman.
Francis smiled, "I couldn't help overhearing your problem cheri, and I have the perfect solution."
"Yeah and what's that?" you asked sarcastically.
"Go to the party!"
You let out a dry laugh, "Ha ha very funny Francis. And how would I do that? Hmm? I have no way to get there."
Francis twirled his keys on his finger, "I have a car~!"
Your eyes widened, "You would do that for me?"
"Oui, but first…"
"I'm not kissing you," you said in a monotone.
"Madmoizelle, I am offended!" He said putting his hand on his heart, "You hurt me. I'm going to help you get ready."
You looked down at your clothes. "What's wrong wi-."
With that Francis grabbed your hand and pulled you upstairs to your bedroom.
After about an hour of work you looked at yourself in the mirror. "I-I look good." You were wearing a small black dress with a pair of black flats. You hair had been curled and put into an elegant bun, a few locks of hair escaping the bun to fall to your neck in an alluring fashion.
"Non cheri," Francis said hugging you from behind, "you look beautiful."
You blushed, "Thanks Francis."
"No problem," he said, "now let's get you to that party."

One drive later…

Bright lights and loud music emanated from the house. It wasn't your typical two story, three bedroom, two bathroom kind of house. It was sleek and modern, a white building with nicely trimmed bushes.
You stepped out of the car, "Oh and remember _________," Francis called, "I'll be back to pick you up at midnight!"
You nodded and ran in to join the party.
Teens danced in a sweaty jubilee of bodies. You watched and it was exactly like Alfred had told you. All eyes looked to you. That's when you saw him, his hair was silver. Eyes bored into you like two uncut rubies.
He approached you, "Hey," he said breathless, probably from all the dancing. "I'm Gilbert, do you want to dance?"
You nodded and took his hand.
The next song that came on was slow and quite romantic. The two of you only looked at each other, not needing words. For what seemed like hours you danced to the slow songs that gently made their way to your ears.
"You're really beautiful," he whispered leaning down to about an inch from your lips.
You blushed, "Th-thank you."
"I really mean it," he said leaning closer to your lips. Finally they touched with a flurry of emotion and passion. He quickly darted his tongue into your mouth and frenched you right there on the dance floor. The two of you pulled apart almost hesitantly, "Want to go upstairs?"
You giggled and nodded, letting him lead you to his room.
"Wow," he whispered as the two of you started kissing on his bed, "you're really hot."
"I think you've said that before," you whispered into his ear as he started to make his way down your neck with kisses.
His hand traveled south as he groaned, "Mein Gott, I think I'm in love."
Just as both of you got undressed you noticed the clock. "Oh crap," you said pushing Gilbert off. "Oh crap," you moaned jumping out of bed and slipping back into the dress. Putting your shoes back on as you ran off.
"Hey, wait!"
It was too late, you were already gone.
Gilbert looked down at the floor, a black lacy bra. He picked it up and looked at the doorway. He smirked. Gilbert Beillschmidt always got his girl.

Two days later…

"Excuse me miss is this yours?" Gilbert asked a brown haired woman who was walking with her boyfriend.
"How dare you sir!" she said slapping him.
Her boyfriend sighed, "What a rude man."
Gilbert had been slapped, kicked, even tased once or twice. Never had he been more stubborn to find one girl.
"Bruder, let's go home," Ludwig said sighing, "this is fruitless."
"Nein, just let me try Alfred's house, he knows all the chicks," Gilbert said.
Ludwig sighed and followed Gilbert to the small red bricked house.
"What do you want?" Arthur glared at Gilbert.
"I want to know if you know who's this is?" Gilbert said producing the bra.
Arthur sighed, "ALFRED!" He let the two German brothers in.
"What can I do for you?" Alfred asked.
Gilbert showed Alfred the undergarment. Alfred gave a sly smile, "Sorry Gil, I don't think black is really you color."
"It isn't mine dummkopf," he snarled, "I just want to know who's it is."
Alfred took the bra and examined it, "She's (bra size), (height), and (weight)." He took a sniff of the item, "She has (eye color) eyes and…(hair color) hair…about (hair length)."
"You got all that from a bra?" Ludwig asked surprised.
"Nah dude, I saw this thing in the wash like a week ago, its ___________'s," Alfred said grinning, "so why do you have __________'s bra?"
Gilbert blushed, "Is she here?"
"Yeah, ____________!" Alfred called.
You ran down the stairs in sweats, your hair pulled back in a sloppy ponytail, "What do you wa…nt…"
"You're the girl I met last night?" Gilbert asked approaching you. You nodded as he took your hand. Gently he slipped your bra on over your t-shirt. Perfect fit.
He took the sides of your face in his hands and kissed you.
"This is a bloody messed up story."
"Ja."
"Oui."
"FRANCIS GET OUT OF MY BLOODY HOUSE!"
And you all lived happily ever after…
No real reason for writing this, it just came to me.

Tell me what you think, I love getting feedback.
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Whybot221 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2015
I hate Cinderella...but cute story...Alfred...hahahaha
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Nice. Reeal smooth Al.
"She's (number redacted), 5'5", and 113lb." He took a sniff of the item, "She has blue eyes and...brown hair...about boob length."
"You got all that from a bra?" Ludwig asked surprised.
"Nah dude, I saw this thing in the wash like a week ago, its Monique's," Alfred said grinning, "so why do you have Monique's bra?"
Real smooth idiot!
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XXskyHD Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Laugh LOL Mirai Kuriyama (Laughs) [V2] Hetalia Prussia (Laugh) Laughing Luhan JA Tard Emote Tomochika Shibuya (Laughing) [V2] Giggle Chen Shocked Baekhyun LuKai : Smack LOL - ANIMATED laugh 
Oh my god, nice one Al:
"She's (I just won't put this here), 5'4", and 120lb." He took a sniff of the item, "She has Green eyes and…Brown hair…about shoulder langth."

"You got all that from a bra?" Ludwig asked surprised.
"Nah dude, I saw this thing in the wash like a week ago, its Rainie's," Alfred said grinning, "so why do you have Rainie's bra?"
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lunerShadows Featured By Owner May 9, 2014
Nice ending.
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Nightflame131 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014
"FRANCIS GET OUT OF MY BLOODY HOUSE!"

I laught so much X3 at that part and great story bro
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Minda909 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Oh Fracais we all know why your really at Arthur's house, to mess with his needle-work!
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alexandra5959 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Student General Artist
Boa Hancock (Faints) [V2] WTF? emoticon 

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wow.
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Hetalialover101anime Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Student Writer
Bloody Nose Grunny Request- Kitty Emote Perverted Nose Bleed 
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hetalialover72 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2013
Me: JESUS, FRANCIS GET DA HELL OUT!!!!!! THE FAIRY GODFATHER ISN'T IN THIS PART!!!!!!!.........I swear......
Gilbert: oh hey Francis! What at you doin' here?
Me: does anyone care about my opinion?
Alfred: nope
Me: SHUT UP AL!!!!! *punches Alfred*
Alfred: OW!
Arthur: bloody hell this is a messed up Cinderella story *facepalms*
Me: it is but it's my Cinderella story!
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Marshallismyking Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014
Haha. I cant stop laugjpngw
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hetalialover72 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014
Pink Meow 
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BBlover01 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Interface Designer
HAHA! :squee: :la:
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XJumpinJellyBeansX Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013

So embarassing asking who's bra it is o-0 lol! -shakes head- :I

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Goddess-ofMercy Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
"Oui" "FRANCIS, GET THE BLOODY HELL OUT OF MY HOUSE!" Ceiling France has returned... :iconceilingfranceplz: Also, I died when Alfred said "Sorry Gil, I don't think black is your color." XD Good job! ^_^ :iconcuteclapplz:
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109144 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
OMG!XD HAHAHAHA!!XD Funny and hot.
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Kekebel Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013
Oh god that was too funny XD
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UndergroundHeaven Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, Francis. You make a lovely fairy godmother/stalker
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RandomPerson1011 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013  Student Writer
This is a seriously messed up Cinderella story...but I like it
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bassebomfjer Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
"You got all that from a bra?"
so funny
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TenshiNoAkasuna Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013
>"This is a bloody messed up story."
"Ja."
"Oui."
"FRANCIS GET OUT OF MY BLOODY HOUSE!"<

Haha. XDDDDDDDD This killed me... And also, that her "shoes made of glass (don't know the definition of this^^)" were the bra! xD
Pretty good! <3
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sarpndo Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
lol....bra.....Awk.....Gilbert would go around asking people if it was their's.
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YasminKirkland1031 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
Francis=Fairy God mother. Crap! This is some messed up life!
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guaguagirl Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
"This is a bloody messed up story."
"Ja."
"Oui."
"FRANCIS GET OUT OF MY BLOODY HOUSE!"

Aaaaaaaaaah, I want a Francis.
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Minda909 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
We all want Francis'
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YasminKirkland1031 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
Yes
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artymista Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my muffins, you made that story bloody awesome..Goodness Francis.
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xXChocoMelkGirlXx Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ermagod. What did I just read.
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CorporalCornbread Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
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lifealwaysgoeson Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love how England doesn't even question why Prussia has my bra.
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hetaliatardis Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
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XxMaggi-JonesXx Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
jaja i love how he goes around asking about a BRA
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Raphael-TMNT Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013
Love it! And I love the Ice Age 3-'quote' too :-D
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AskMontreal Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
fraaaaaaance XD
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ChippyMonkey Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Francis would be the perfect fairy godmother :iconmegustaplz:
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Lassie-C-123 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
yeah, if gilbert tried to get up my shirt, i'd hit him with a tazer too.
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d-n-sapple Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Arthur: "FRANCIS GET OUT OF MY BLOODY HOUSE!"

Me reading: *laughing my butt off at 4:00am*
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Lemonater Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013
i never eally liked cinderella, but i think it would be awesome if you made a series with a bunch of fairy tales... i think that would be cool XD
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hetaliaizawesome Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love and hate you so much for writing this.XD
The hate part is because I got my Pajamas wet from thw water I was drinking while laughing so,so hard~ XD
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fantasylover103 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
XD Lol.
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GABBZZLOVESANIME Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wth did i just read XD i loved it!
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fuzzycats12 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
xD that was great. i can't stop laughing seriously
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SarahGoodwill Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
LOL Wow!
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Shuru10 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:icondeathstareplz: A bra and Francis as my fairy god-father? O__e This is the best Cinderella parody I've seen!! :D :iconlaplz:

Weird how they were showing this on abc family earlier. O__o
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Banshee-Scream Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I was watching RED, so yeah...that is weird...
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Yasaijiru7 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
XD a bra? France is my fairy godmother? :iconsweetjesusplz: I love this story!
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Banshee-Scream Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you ^^
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justfireheart13 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That was great!
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Memichow Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Student Writer
XD I LOVE IT!
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hetafan123 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013
:iconfacepalmplz: why my bra...

good story all in all though
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Banshee-Scream Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
>////< I couldn't help myself.
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